Looking for Readers [June Challenge]

Okay, so I'm nearly finished with the re-write of my June story, "The Ring at Iraellan". Someone on another PbP site asked for a piece of fiction set in the alternate "Star Wars" galaxy the site is building (slowly) and so I did that, since I had no ideas for this month. I worked in Fear and Pharmaceuticals (though in mostly minor roles) but they're there.

Anyway, I want to clean it up as best I can first before I post it there, so any takers? Knowledge of "Star Wars" or the alternate galaxy is not really needed (except that "slicing" is "hacking into computers"). There is no excessive violence (or much of any violence, really) or anything offensive. It's about a woman on a humanitaran mission for her homeworld who uses some illegal methods to complete her mission.