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Beyond the Dead-Gray Mist (Diceless Eberron)

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TL/DR: If you're not willing to read this entire post you're probably not going to be interested in this game. Sorry!

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Originally Posted by Prince Oargev ir'Wynarn, Cyran Refugee Camp, Breland, Therendor 4th, 994 YK View Post
People of Cyre! Remnants of my dear homeland! I, Oargev, scion of the ir'Wynarn line, son of Mishann, Queen of Cyre, rightful ruler of Galifar, stand before you today, forced by the terrible events of the last weeks to grasp the mantle of leadership years, decades, before it should have been taken from my mother, your Queen.

Yet my pain is nothing compared to yours, remnants of Cyre. I have lost my mother, my wife, my family, in the cruel, inexplicable events of Olarune 20th, and I mourn for them, mourn for them with all my heart. But there are those among who have lost not only parents and spouses, but children. There are those among you who have lost not only family and friends, but entire towns, entire cities. And you mourn for them, we mourn for them, with all our hearts.

But Olarune 20th, this day, this terrible day, this Day of Mourning, did not rob us only of our families, our friends, our dwellings, our livelihoods. It robbed us of our nation. Of Cyre. And compared to this loss, all the other tragedies of this terrible, inexplicable day are as nothing. (No, not inexplicable, I swear to you, for something, someone caused this day, this Day of Mourning, and I, we, shall never rest until that force is brought to justice...)

For on Olarune 19th, in Cyre, people still died, mothers and fathers, wives and husbands, daughters and sons. But one fragile, wonderful, shining idea lived on; Cyre lived on, beloved, cherished Cyre. In Eston, in Kalazart, in wonderful, shining Metrol, Cyre lived on, gleaming brightly at the heart of Khorvaire. If the Dragon Above, mighty Siberys himself, were to wake and to look down upon the life-bearing corpse of his sister Eberron, he would not have been able, on Olarune 19th, to tear his gaze away from Cyre, wonderful, shining Cyre, beloved, cherished Cyre, Cyre, the Jewel of Galifar. Now, though--

Full disclosure: this paragraph (but not the rest of the speech) is taken from Five Nations, p. 77.
Weep, oh nations of Khorvaire, for the Jewel of Galifar is no more. You have finally completed what you started when you rejected the true and proper right of Mishann to ascend the throne of Galifar. With your jealousy and petty ambitions, you have brought this disaster on us all! Weep, my brothers and sisters, for our homes and our families have been eliminated in a foul and cowardly way. Do not let Cyre be forgotten! Do not let the Day of Mourning end! Not until we have discovered the villain. Not until we have made the villain face justice for this heinous crime. Not until Cyre’s children are once more safe and content within their homeland. Weep this day, my fellow Cyrans, and never forget. But tomorrow . . . tomorrow we begin to hunt down this villain, to demand justice, and to rebuild beloved, cherished Cyre. Tomorrow! Tomorrow we shall go home!
You were one of the members of the crowd that day, the beaten, bedraggled remnants of once-mighty Cyre. Afterwards, Prince Oargev himself sought you out, invited you to his tent. There, he admitted to you and a few others that he had not been entirely forthcoming in his speech. Not only was the Day of Mourning (as Oargev had called it) not inexplicable, Oargev believed he had found an explanation for it--not, yet, a means or a motive, but a perpetrator, one far too powerful to accuse directly. No, revenging Cyre would not be simple, nor easy, nor quick. But standing in his tent that day, Prince Oargev, along with you and a few others, took a solemn oath: that once a new Cyre rose out of the ashes of the old, you would kindle a pyre of revenge, and let the perpetrator take its place.
PremiseThe game will be structured like a TV series: it will be divided into discrete episodes which combine together to make an overarching goal. After a prologue (the "pilot", tentatively titled "Memories Beyond") of solo threads starting on Olarune 19th, 994 YK establishing how the players arrived at the future site of New Cyre in time for Oargev's speech, first season will cover the period from then up until the signing of the Treaty of Thronehold in 996 YK--episodes will more-or-less alternate between treaty negotiation sessions and more action-based stuff, such as expeditions into the Mournland. Additional seasons will cover similar or longer spans of time--fulfilling the oath of revenge may very well take decades. For the most part, players will act as a team, rather than splitting up--so all PCs will need to be able to handle both social interactions and more physical work, if not actually heavy combat.
MechanicsThe game will be diceless, so there won't actually be any mechanics. However, note that it will be on the simulationist side of things: I will track things like dates, travel times, etc., and I will probably insist that the players keep detailed accounting of their possessions (the better to take them away ), though this is open to discussion.

On an OOC level, players will have a fair amount of metagame control: as noted above, the players will even choose who their primary antagonist will be. Especially during the prologue threads, I may go further: for example, I may say things like "your character walks onto the lighting rail car. Describe who else is present."

Finally, note that all IC posts should be in present tense, unless noted otherwise.
ResourcesI welcome people new to Eberron, as long as they're willing to put some effort into learning the setting. Fortunately, this is very easy, at least for a diceless game; all of the published (3.5 era) lore is freely available, between the Dragonshards and the Grand History of Eberron. You need not have read these before you create the character, but I expect you to be willing to look things up when necessary.

Note that I will default to the 3.5 version of Eberron, as that's the version I know best: don't expect dragonborn or Feyspires. However, this shouldn't stop you from using this material in your application if you want to: I'll include the 4e elements in the game if they're important to any of the PCs.
PacingI don't want to exclude anyone from this game based on posting rate. With that said, you'll be able to participate most fully if you can post
i.e. this is your usual rate. You don't have to live up to it 52 weeks a year: I'm not going to kick you from the game if you go on vacation, have busy periods at work, etc.--but please notify me a week or so in advance if possible when this is happening.
regularly at least twice a week. It's probably best if you can post at a faster clip during the prologue thread, since you'll be the only one driving your character's story and I intend to end all of the threads at the same time. However, if this is an issue we can work something out--perhaps working out some of the narrative over Gchat, or leaving some of it aside to be worked out later.

I will endeavor to regularly post at least every 48 hours; my usual rate should be one round of posts per day.
Number of PlayersApparently when you leave this field blank in the new ad form, you get 1. This will not actually be a solo game: it's safe to say that there will be more than 3 players and less than 10, but I can't be more precise than that right now. (Note that asking whether this is, in fact, a solo game, is an excellent way to prove you haven't read the whole ad and make me much less likely to accept your application.)
Application ProcessFirst, my now-standard description of what I want in a player and in a PC:

I want interesting characters; I also want interesting players. I want characters who have goals; I want players who have the motivation to create new goals once the first set have been met. I want characters who aren't centered around combat (perhaps characters who have never fought); I want players who are interested in things beyond killing and looting. I want characters who inhabit the world around them; I want players who want to explore and create every last detail of that world.


I don't expect your applications to be complete when first posted: instead, after you post an initial idea I will work with you to make the character more at home in Eberron, and to flesh out details of their past I can use to torment you with later. The best way to see what I'm looking for is to look at the ad for one of my previous games: since it was diceless, the best thing to look at is pink peril's application, posted here, and the sort of questions I asked and pp answered.

However, there are four necessary but not sufficient items I would like in your application by the deadline:

1. Where your character was on Olarune 19th, 994 YK (the day before the Day of Mourning).
2. A "day in the life," i.e. a more-or-less typical day for your character before the Mourning. I will probably use this to start your prologue thread, so you should probably make it at least somewhat interesting. See the descriptions by Crossroad, pink peril, Galedeep, and ShadowBright from my last advertisement for examples of the type of thing I'm looking for.
3. Why your character took the oath.
4. A possible explanation for the Mourning. This need not be what your character will believe after it occurs--in fact, it probably shouldn't be, since we'll play that out directly and since uncovering the nature of the Mourning will probably end up being a big plot point. This is more to make sure that you have a good enough grasp on Eberron that you can come up with something, and for my own selfish purposes.

Most of your application (points 3 and 4 above are an obvious exception) should pertain to your character before the Mourning. The Mourning itself should leave a big impression on your character (at least if they're actually in Cyre at the time), and it may alter your character's personality considerably. If that's the case, you should feel free to make some notes on what you think the effect of these changes will be, and we can work together in your prologue to justify them.

Applications may be private or public, I don't care, but note that the prologue posts will be public. I expect my players to be mature enough to separate IC from OOC knowledge--or, better yet, use their metagame knowledge to make the IC experience even more interesting. (I will give everyone private OOC threads, though.)

Go ahead and post applications in this thread, unless there's some rule against that now that I'm not aware of.

Please submit applications by 8 PM EST on the 22nd.

One last note: I will accept applications for Prince Oargev, but they will need to be exceptional, since having Oargev as a PC will significantly change the nature, or at least structure, of the game.
Applications

pink peril: Graece ir'Merat
Belul: Ali
Pumpkin31415: Taelin Phaloni
WhiteKnight777: Sebastian Nod
Silverkiss: Kormác Mondlicht
Karayan: Iskra ir'Siran
Havelock: Satros
RavenQueen: Valeriya ir'Rurik
Wizard of the Coat: Olivander Greybern d'Deneith
lasseram: Fargherat the Mourner
ShadowBright: Teela

Game Description:

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Originally Posted by Prince Oargev ir'Wynarn, Cyran Refugee Camp, Breland, Therendor 4th, 994 YK View Post
People of Cyre! Remnants of my dear homeland! I, Oargev, scion of the ir'Wynarn line, son of Mishann, Queen of Cyre, rightful ruler of Galifar, stand before you today, forced by the terrible events of the last weeks to grasp the mantle of leadership years, decades, before it should have been taken from my mother, your Queen.

Yet my pain is nothing compared to yours, remnants of Cyre. I have lost my mother, my wife, my family, in the cruel, inexplicable events of Olarune 20th, and I mourn for them, mourn for them with all my heart. But there are those among who have lost not only parents and spouses, but children. There are those among you who have lost not only family and friends, but entire towns, entire cities. And you mourn for them, we mourn for them, with all our hearts.

But Olarune 20th, this day, this terrible day, this Day of Mourning, did not rob us only of our families, our friends, our dwellings, our livelihoods. It robbed us of our nation. Of Cyre. And compared to this loss, all the other tragedies of this terrible, inexplicable day are as nothing. (No, not inexplicable, I swear to you, for something, someone caused this day, this Day of Mourning, and I, we, shall never rest until that force is brought to justice...)

For on Olarune 19th, in Cyre, people still died, mothers and fathers, wives and husbands, daughters and sons. But one fragile, wonderful, shining idea lived on; Cyre lived on, beloved, cherished Cyre. In Eston, in Kalazart, in wonderful, shining Metrol, Cyre lived on, gleaming brightly at the heart of Khorvaire. If the Dragon Above, mighty Siberys himself, were to wake and to look down upon the life-bearing corpse of his sister Eberron, he would not have been able, on Olarune 19th, to tear his gaze away from Cyre, wonderful, shining Cyre, beloved, cherished Cyre, Cyre, the Jewel of Galifar. Now, though--

Full disclosure: this paragraph (but not the rest of the speech) is taken from Five Nations, p. 77.
Weep, oh nations of Khorvaire, for the Jewel of Galifar is no more. You have finally completed what you started when you rejected the true and proper right of Mishann to ascend the throne of Galifar. With your jealousy and petty ambitions, you have brought this disaster on us all! Weep, my brothers and sisters, for our homes and our families have been eliminated in a foul and cowardly way. Do not let Cyre be forgotten! Do not let the Day of Mourning end! Not until we have discovered the villain. Not until we have made the villain face justice for this heinous crime. Not until Cyre’s children are once more safe and content within their homeland. Weep this day, my fellow Cyrans, and never forget. But tomorrow . . . tomorrow we begin to hunt down this villain, to demand justice, and to rebuild beloved, cherished Cyre. Tomorrow! Tomorrow we shall go home!
You were one of the members of the crowd that day, the beaten, bedraggled remnants of once-mighty Cyre. Afterwards, Prince Oargev himself sought you out, invited you to his tent. There, he admitted to you and a few others that he had not been entirely forthcoming in his speech. Not only was the Day of Mourning (as Oargev had called it) not inexplicable, Oargev believed he had found an explanation for it--not, yet, a means or a motive, but a perpetrator, one far too powerful to accuse directly. No, revenging Cyre would not be simple, nor easy, nor quick. But standing in his tent that day, Prince Oargev, along with you and a few others, took a solemn oath: that once a new Cyre rose out of the ashes of the old, you would kindle a pyre of revenge, and let the perpetrator take its place.
PremiseThe game will be structured like a TV series: it will be divided into discrete episodes which combine together to make an overarching goal. After a prologue (the "pilot", tentatively titled "Memories Beyond") of solo threads starting on Olarune 19th, 994 YK establishing how the players arrived at the future site of New Cyre in time for Oargev's speech, first season will cover the period from then up until the signing of the Treaty of Thronehold in 996 YK--episodes will more-or-less alternate between treaty negotiation sessions and more action-based stuff, such as expeditions into the Mournland. Additional seasons will cover similar or longer spans of time--fulfilling the oath of revenge may very well take decades. For the most part, players will act as a team, rather than splitting up--so all PCs will need to be able to handle both social interactions and more physical work, if not actually heavy combat.


Last edited by jalapeno_dude; Jun 22 '12 at 10:41pm.. Reason: added applications
Added a vignette for Kormác's first encounter with Mevakri.

Do you require the complete write-out of the background? I was thinking of writing his confrontation with his parents as another vignette, and other than that there aren't any major points in his background, I guess. I could do it, but I admit that I'm being a bit lazy at the moment, and I'm not sure if I'll have time to finish everything up before the deadline as it is.

Less than 22 hours left! There's a good chance I won't be able to provide feedback tomorrow, so I suggest you either submit applications tonight (ideally in the next 2-3 hours) or make them really good--ideally, both.
@WhiteKnight777Thanks for this--unfortunately, you left out the most interesting parts. (And also stuff on Zilargo, Darguun, Valenar, etc.) Note, too, that goblins don't quite fit into the same category as the rest of the "monstrous races"--they're widespread across all of Khorvaire (because, after all, they were there first). So not only does Cyre have goblinoid mercenaries fighting for it, it also has a fair number of goblins in its regular army, and there are sizable (but generally segregated) goblin areas in the cities of Cyre.

Also: how much of the claims that Sebastian gets along well with both nobles and commoners is self-delusion, and how much of it is fact?
@SilverkissRe the background: no, it's not required. If you're short on time I'd definitely recommend finishing up the vignettes first. I'd also like to know more about Kormác's philosophy, and how it differs from Mevakri's.

Re the vignette: you cut it off just before the interesting part. I get a picture of Mevakri for the first time, but I don't yet have an idea of the discussions that led to Kormác's disagreement with his parents...

Might not be able to finish my vignettes by tomorrow, JD--I may just be cutting my losses and submitting Taelin as-is. If you have any further feedback/questions/whatever, I'll do my best to answer them before tomorrow.

The disagreements he already had, he mostly just got spurned into action by talking with Mevakri. Before meeting her, leaving his parents and going out into the world, he only ever went to small villages, and lived more or less secluded and alone; talking to her showed him that there was more that he could do with his life than living in the shadow of his parents, all the while reviling and disagreeing with their style of life.

I have some flashbacks and mentions of the discussions itself planned for the "A New Beginning" vignette, which will be about him actually confronting his parents. I'll also expand more on his philosophy on "Darkness Within", where he also uses his Dragonmark.... and maybe I'll write out a third vignette, if I have the time/energy for it.

Alright here's the likely last major update for Ali until deadline.


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both. [fieldset=@WhiteKnight777]Thanks for this--unfortunately, you left out the most interesting parts. (And also stuff on Zilargo, Darguun, Valenar, etc.) Note, too, that goblins don't quite fit into the same category as the rest of the "monstrous races"--they're widespread across all of Khorvaire (because, after all, they were there first). So not only does Cyre have goblinoid mercenaries fighting for it, it also has a fair number of goblins in its regular army, and there are sizable (but generally segregated) goblin areas in the cities of Cyre.

Also: how much of the claims that Sebastian gets along well with both nobles and commoners is self-delusion, and how much of it is fact?
Yeah - I left those parts out 'cause I didn't have access to all my sources at the time, and I wanted to try and fact-check before I finished 'em. I've added stuff for the five nations, and I've made a distinction between "Monstrous races" as a whole, and goblinoids in specific.

On the subject of Sebastian's relations with nobility and commoners... well, the blurbs I wrote on the subjects are fairly accurate... they've just been spun. Sebastian gets along fairly well with members of either class, in that he can go to a noble's party and not embarass him, or walk into a working-class tavern and (probably) not get tossed out onto the streets fer bein' a nob. On the other hand, he's something of an outsider in either setting. Among nobleborn, his dress, manners, and a hundred other little details (not to mention the simple fact of his name,) reveal him as "not one of us." How an individual noble-born reacts to that depends on their prejudices. Some people have sneered at him for his presumption, others embrace him for it (Violet, for example.) A rare few simply don't care, and try to judge him on merit alone. And then there's always those... wonderful individuals who consider him a "credit to his people."

Among the commoners, it's a similar situation, only in reverse - even if he were to dress down for the evening, his breadth of knowledge, his mode of speech, and the subjects he talks about all mark him out as a member of government. Again, how an individual reacts to him depends on their personal predilections and prejudices. Some people get pugnacious 'cause they think he's putting on airs. Some people get nervous, because they think he'll report what they say to someone of authority. Some people try to curry favor. And some commoners don't care, or even hope he might be a way to get their voices heard.

As always, thanks for the feedback. It's extremely helpful in smoothing out rough edges.

I have finally overcome a nasty flu and a rather heavy work-load to complete my application.
Regrettably, there won't be time for many rounds of constructive criticism, but I promise to work more on my character after the deadline if you are interested in having him in your group.
Also, I decided to come out in the open with my app.

Fargherat the Mourner
Race:
Shifter
Nationality: Cyran
Occupation:Cultivator
Age: 43











Might write another blurb if I feel in the mood.

The last part is a bit weird, was easier to write it that way. Developed a few concepts compared to earlier material though.

Update 2 is up and with that, I am off the computer until sometime this evening. Taking a much needed day off work and going somewhere that is not-work.

Best of luck to everyone!




 

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