Added a vignette for Kormác's first encounter with Mevakri.
Do you require the complete write-out of the background? I was thinking of writing his confrontation with his parents as another vignette, and other than that there aren't any major points in his background, I guess. I could do it, but I admit that I'm being a bit lazy at the moment, and I'm not sure if I'll have time to finish everything up before the deadline as it is.
Less than 22 hours left! There's a good chance I won't be able to provide feedback tomorrow, so I suggest you either submit applications tonight (ideally in the next 2-3 hours) or make them really good--ideally, both.
Might not be able to finish my vignettes by tomorrow, JD--I may just be cutting my losses and submitting Taelin as-is. If you have any further feedback/questions/whatever, I'll do my best to answer them before tomorrow.
The disagreements he already had, he mostly just got spurned into action by talking with Mevakri. Before meeting her, leaving his parents and going out into the world, he only ever went to small villages, and lived more or less secluded and alone; talking to her showed him that there was more that he could do with his life than living in the shadow of his parents, all the while reviling and disagreeing with their style of life.
I have some flashbacks and mentions of the discussions itself planned for the "A New Beginning" vignette, which will be about him actually confronting his parents. I'll also expand more on his philosophy on "Darkness Within", where he also uses his Dragonmark.... and maybe I'll write out a third vignette, if I have the time/energy for it.
both. [fieldset=@WhiteKnight777]Thanks for this--unfortunately, you left out the most interesting parts. (And also stuff on Zilargo, Darguun, Valenar, etc.) Note, too, that goblins don't quite fit into the same category as the rest of the "monstrous races"--they're widespread across all of Khorvaire (because, after all, they were there first). So not only does Cyre have goblinoid mercenaries fighting for it, it also has a fair number of goblins in its regular army, and there are sizable (but generally segregated) goblin areas in the cities of Cyre.
Also: how much of the claims that Sebastian gets along well with both nobles and commoners is self-delusion, and how much of it is fact?
Yeah - I left those parts out 'cause I didn't have access to all my sources at the time, and I wanted to try and fact-check before I finished 'em. I've added stuff for the five nations, and I've made a distinction between "Monstrous races" as a whole, and goblinoids in specific.
On the subject of Sebastian's relations with nobility and commoners... well, the blurbs I wrote on the subjects are fairly accurate... they've just been spun. Sebastian gets along fairly well with members of either class, in that he can go to a noble's party and not embarass him, or walk into a working-class tavern and (probably) not get tossed out onto the streets fer bein' a nob. On the other hand, he's something of an outsider in either setting. Among nobleborn, his dress, manners, and a hundred other little details (not to mention the simple fact of his name,) reveal him as "not one of us." How an individual noble-born reacts to that depends on their prejudices. Some people have sneered at him for his presumption, others embrace him for it (Violet, for example.) A rare few simply don't care, and try to judge him on merit alone. And then there's always those... wonderful individuals who consider him a "credit to his people."
Among the commoners, it's a similar situation, only in reverse - even if he were to dress down for the evening, his breadth of knowledge, his mode of speech, and the subjects he talks about all mark him out as a member of government. Again, how an individual reacts to him depends on their personal predilections and prejudices. Some people get pugnacious 'cause they think he's putting on airs. Some people get nervous, because they think he'll report what they say to someone of authority. Some people try to curry favor. And some commoners don't care, or even hope he might be a way to get their voices heard.
As always, thanks for the feedback. It's extremely helpful in smoothing out rough edges.
I have finally overcome a nasty flu and a rather heavy work-load to complete my application.
Regrettably, there won't be time for many rounds of constructive criticism, but I promise to work more on my character after the deadline if you are interested in having him in your group.
Also, I decided to come out in the open with my app.
Fargherat the Mourner
Race: Shifter Nationality: Cyran Occupation:Cultivator